Thursday, January 15, 2009

Serendipity Again!!!


There was a Short Fiction writing contest "Ascension" @ http://www.clarityofnight.blogspot.com/. They had given a picture on which the participants had to write a story…
Though I was late to send my post, but nevertheless even I made an attempt to write a story..its my first attempt to story writing so would appreciate all ur valuable feedbacks...


My writeup :


Serendipity Again!!!



It was a stormy night. The wind roared, the sky turned black in fury and the nature sobbed vehemently.The night was furious; people did not dare to come out of their refuges.
The panic was clearly visible on people’s faces…It seemed as if the fear had made Sandra immune to all that was going around …
While everyone was running helter-skelter, she took the escalator to reach the first floor of the mall…As she moved up, she recollected the tempestuous night…That night she could never forget …
Four years ago, when the nature played mischief and it rained heavily, just like this night, she met Sam who, like others, was waiting for the clouds to clear. Together they managed to get into a partially done mall.
She did not refrain from getting into her business when Sam gave a peck on her cheek. That night she felt something that she had never felt before. She loved the deception. Though this was her job, she couldn’t remain professional. Emotions flowed as he made love to her. For the first time in life she felt she was loved for who she was, not for what she did.
She came back to reality as she ascended and reached the floor. Blood rushed through her veins when she saw Sam looking at her intently giving one of those –serendipitous smile. Both stood there for a moment looking in each others eyes…reliving the night…reliving the love that had no name…
It was evident that even Sam was equally glad and indeed this accident was beautiful.
In Sandra’s word it was Serendipity again!!!

Editing Credits: Yamini Murty

4 comments:

Rohit said...

What made u write that, dude!!!

This piece shows how the beauty lies in the unsaid words...

With a little more uncertainty u wud have successfully created a mirror... People with different perceptions wud have perceived it differently and enjoyed or criticized it accordingly...

My choice of words might be harsh but this creation has its beauty in its incompleteness...

Keep writing... u r constantly improving...

Unknown said...

too good...
bina kahe sab kuch keh diya yar tune..
Keep writing...

Obscure Optimist said...

an unexplored area of emotions, so well put up... fantastic :) :)

Sudip said...

Pretty good yaar! The mention of 'business' puts a lot of things into your head! And you start fictionalizing...